Poem Sketching - Song of Sorrow



Song of Sorrow

Kicking around pine cones
It's cold, the wind
Pushes raindrops against my face
Beating, tiny notes of music
Lamenting.

Would it not be wondrous - grow wings,
fly up, add notes - the soft
dancing notes of a tambourine.

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From Imaginary Garden with Real Toads, using the revisited Poem Sketching prompt.
Word group used: pines, tambourines, raindrops, wings


Comments

  1. Ah, the cold and wind and raindrops are definitely reason to lament.

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  2. I'd prefer the sound of a tambourine to the sound of the cold biting wind.

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    1. Me too! I loved this prompt. I'd never have used 'tambourine' without it!

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  3. It would be good to be lifted up at times...perhaps if we listen hard enough!

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  4. We have such a rain today... and I would prefer the real tambourine too...

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  5. I can really feel this poem, the lamenting, the cold rain.......and love the note of hope at the end, which uplifts the reader.......

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  6. I love your sketch and what a delightful poem. I often wish I could fly high like a bird and soar on the thermal winds to warmer places.

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  7. The first stanza made me think of autumn...and the second of spring! I like the sketch, too--adorable.

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  8. indeed the song of sorrow but your words can make one dance in joy.

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  9. This is such a profound write. I truly feel the despair of the persona

    Have a blessed Sunday

    Much love...

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  10. Love the imagery at the end... fly up and add notes!

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  11. I really enjoyed this, Kerridwen :) I know I'm echoing others when I tell you that I loved the imagery :) You did a lovely job on this poem :)

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  12. Unique and interesting style.
    ZQ

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  13. Lovely writing. Nature reflecting one's mood and making sad music, the yearning for the tambourine of joy. Very well written. I enjoyed this so much.

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  14. That tambourine surprised me... nice! I can hear it.

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