The Great Catch Up Day - Poems #24-26

A pond in Roehampton - photo by me


These three were also written in the park. It's not easy writing good poems after a month! 

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Wicklow Lune

There's a hill
Where travellers go, seeking truth
I have Wicklow

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(Following the 2,4,6,8,2 word pattern)

Wicklow Cinquain

Next year
When memories have faded
I'll paint Wicklow on the wall
Pretend the secrets it contains are all mine -
Forget yours.

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Reading Rilke

Rilke had it right, with his ideas of love.
"For holding on comes easily; we do not need to learn it.” 
The night transforms it, it seeps through the walls.
Laying alone with thoughts for company
Love the other side of Earth,
A young poet waits for letters


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Disclaimer: These are poems I won't be spending a lot of time on. As such, I don't expect perfection (neither do I need it). However feel free to tell me what you think about them, and if you enjoy certain lines more than others - I'm quite OK with constructive criticism!

Are you participating in NaPo? Do you write poetry? Feel free to comment below and leave a link to your day one poems, and any general comments you wish to leave.

Comments

  1. Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)17 February 2015 at 11:25

    this incites. it captures a thought of one who is wanting to hoard a piece of life for themselves and plastering it on his wall for only he to take pleasure. and yet, the last stanza, if you will, seems to emote the passion of a poet.

    just say'n

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    1. Kerridwen17 February 2015 at 16:24

      Thank you for stopping by, and for your comment! I suppose in a way there is an element of hoarding a piece of life.. nice one!

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  2. Laura17 February 2015 at 16:33

    I adored your "Reading Rilke" poem… really touched me… beautiful.

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  3. Sherry Blue Sky17 February 2015 at 17:38

    I enjoyed these, and the beautiful photo. I especially like "Love the other side of Earth, a young poet waits for letters."

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  4. Rosemary Nissen-Wade17 February 2015 at 20:14

    I enjoyed al these. I particularly love, 'The night transforms it, it seeps through the walls.'

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  5. Susie Clevenger18 February 2015 at 04:50

    These are all beautiful. The last one is my favorite.

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  6. Gillena Cox19 February 2015 at 06:24

    nice!!!

    http://myblog-verses.blogspot.com/2015/02/25.html

    much love...

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    1. Kerridwen20 February 2015 at 21:54

      Thanks! I'll definitely link up to one of your Monday Writes soon!

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  7. Magaly Guerrero19 February 2015 at 12:29

    "Pretend the secrets it contains are all mine -
    Forget yours."

    I love these lines, for they speak of reclaiming the self.

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  8. grapeling20 February 2015 at 06:11

    I especially like the Rilke piece ~

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