Dialogue Between a Stone and a Star





It's day two of NaPoWriMo, and I'm back with a late night poem! (If you consider this time to be late. I suppose it depends!). I've been reading Stones and Stars, dipping in and out, since I never read poetry collections cover to cover, and the poems are really lovely.
Then, last night, I couldn't sleep, and at around 2 am I had an idea for a poem - a conversation between a stone and a star. At first I had the idea that the stone would be lamenting its lack of qualities to the star, and then I realised it would be much nicer to have the stone itself know of its qualities.. Yes it's all a little silly, but the idea stayed with me all day. I very much hope you like it!

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Dialogue Between a Stone and a Star

The Star:

I am above, dear stone, both in matter and place
I quite literally fill the whole of space.
I shine and give hope to lost souls in the dark
And lost travellers look to me for support, guidance.
I'm bright, I'm beautiful, I'm a poem in motion
And don't people say: 'friends are like stars', that's the notion.
I am vast though look tiny, I paint the night sky.
I'm a horse, and a bear, and so many more.
And you, what are you, but a measly stone?
To be stepped on, and thrown.

The Stone:

Dear star, you are right - you clearly shine bright.
But mistaken, you are too, for I the stone
Am no mere tool to be thrown.
And by day, what are you? All but forgotten
You are dazzled by all that is modern.
City lights, city nights - where are you then?
You are never there for the grey city men.
Have you ever seen a child on a beach
Look intently for pebbles to collect?
I am a trophy, a game, I can skip on a lake
A poem to be held, admired, and kept.
Dear star, you are bright, but oh so very vain
And too far, too far, for the common men.

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Disclaimer: These are poems I won't be spending a lot of time on. As such, I don't expect perfection (neither do I need it). However feel free to tell me what you think about them, and if you enjoy certain lines more than others - I'm quite OK with constructive criticism!

Are you participating in NaPo? Do you write poetry? Feel free to comment below and leave a link to your day one poems, and any general comments you wish to leave.

Comments

  1. I really liked the concept of your poem. It's nice to consider two objects finding their value no matter their place in the universe of life.

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    1. Thank you very much for your kind comment.

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  2. This is very much like an old fable with the dialogue of who has the highest worth... wonder what the sun would say..

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    1. Ah, interesting. I probably have heard of the fable but can't remember it right now.. I think the sun would say that without him, there wouldn't be any human to enjoy either stone or star.. haha!

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  3. I guess that it is a good thing both the star and the stone are happy with their situations and the purpose of their existence.

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    1. I agree! They both have their own purposes :) Thanks for your comment!

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  4. It is good when each appreciates who they are rather than wishing to be something else. The stone can be a worthy stone & the star a worthy star. No competition! Smiles. An interesting theme in this poem.

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    1. Thank you very much - I guess 2am ideas aren't all bad! This is my favourite NaPo poem so far. :)

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  5. A very interesting & creative piece!

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    1. Thanks a lot! It's my favourite at the moment - I'm glad the poetry collection inspired me!

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  6. ha. i will take both..i love the stars...and i love my rocks...each have that which makes them special but each as well have their deficiencies....and its fun to think of them having this conversation....

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    1. The star definitely needs to learn humility, but I do love my stars all the same! And I was very much the child who looked for stones. ;) Thanks!

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  7. the star spoke first...so...quite a snob and i like the stone's wit...enjoyable lines...

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    1. Thank you! Yes, the star is not very good at being humble.. heheh.. But I love both. ;) Thanks a lot for your comment!

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  8. an interesting concept, this dialogue. both have their place in the grand scheme of things in the universe. the star is a bit arrogant, and i am glad the stone is able to bring it down a notch with its wit.

    All the best for your NaPoWriMo! can't say the same for me, only 2 poems so far. :)

    i write too

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    1. Thanks for your comment - yes, the star needed to hear that I think. ;) Will now check out your blog :)

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